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B L Cook

Hello there! I'm Brian Cook, and welcome to my page! And... that's... that's 'bout it.

I'm a n00b, but it looks like a fun place here.

  • Last seen on Mar 10 11:44 AM. Member since February 2.
  • I am a 22 year old guy from Utah (United States)
  • When I'm not writing, I'm an English Teaching major at Utah State University.
  • Visit my homepage at www.alexandre.furtopia.org
  • I have 13 comments, 4 archived poems

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  • Papyrus : Good Day, Sir ! on February 4
    Mr. Cook,

    greetings from your SP family!

    glad to have you join us, really. i know you'll find our critiques very helpful. and vice-versa!

    Pap
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  • skipeople : Welcome to SP!!!! on February 2
    Stopping by to say hello...soooo hello?

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  • on Deterioration by B L Cook, on February 10
    Thank you very much!

    Writing really is a thing that helps me. I felt horrible when I wrote this, and I still felt pretty bad afterwards, but it mostly disappeared. It really does help me to feel cleansed, and I feel like I can keep going.

    Again, thank you!

  • on Deterioration by B L Cook, on February 10
    Perhaps I could help a little bit with this one.

    For the form of the sonnet, I took a traditional English sonnet and, well... tweaked it, mainly to show the deterioration that happens to the main character. The first quatrain holds the rhyme pattern ABAB; the only thing that's slightly irregular is the forth line, which has 9 syllables instead of 10.

    In the second quatrain, I still rhyme two of the lines, however, starting on the second line of the quatrain, I abandon the iambic pentameter feel that sonnets have, and it goes array; the forth line still has 10 syllables, but you can't read it like you would a sonnet (and if you try to, it ends up sounding very rough).

    The third quatrain is in complete disarray.

    In the couplet, to end, I abandon all sense of correct writing, not even capitolizing "i."

    I hope that answered your question. As to the subject of the poem, you understood very well; the day I wrote it was a horrible day, to tell the truth.

    Thank you for reading, Lad, and for your comment.