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Blooming Poet

I am Molly and I am 17 years young. I love my boyfriend of almost a year so much.

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  • on Fade Away by SweetAngelKitten, on January 27, 2008
    This is pretty good, but it has a lot of errors I should point out that would make it even better:
    idon't= I don't
    im=I'm
    I think also cruel is too common of a word.
    i=I
    i'll= I'll
    Other then that, I just thnk you should try using less common words overall.

    language: 2, rhythm: 4, subject: 5, tone: 4, form: 4.

  • on So what have you been up to all these years? by dave ochs, on January 26, 2008
    I love how this penned such a beautiful story of life and the experiences that go along with it. I promise you if you work at it you can probably duplicate something like this.

    language: 5, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 3.