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  • on driven. by Contralto, on October 25, 2006
    Actually, very far.  It's more of a nighttime scene from my imagination.  It's actually mainly about my best friend&love's leaving next Summer for a year. Originally, I had written it in song form, but now it's drifted back into a poem.  "'Green dust from your wings trailing across the snow'" is kind of an inside thing relating to an important dream I had nearly a year ago when I first began to realize my feelings for him. I'm glad you liked it.

  • on Unspoken Truth by SweetAngelKitten, on October 22, 2006

    Lovely.

    I loved the way you ended this poem.  As the poet below me said, I could find no weak lines in this poem.  I like the form you chose and the one-word lines, and I also like the obvious hurt you feel by what was never said.  It's definetely a strong poem, and while it may be short, it did make me think.  Great job, I can find nearly nothing to really critisize in this.  

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