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Something’s rocking in the bough
Along the night wind’s song - From A Place Named There at allpoetry
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moon - where secrets are kept at allpoetry
dreams aren’t made of clay
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on Lunch break in Manhattan by William McGarvey, on April 23Oooh. Very..very 'beat'. Dylan would have sung
about it.
Content is a bit stretchy. But I love the reference to the bum.
By the way, I heard that in a research for 'happiness', the country which arrived at happiness more than any other in the world was Sweden. Asked why, according to some who were on the street, ..." because we admire what we have and aren't embarrassed about what we don't.".
Struck me.hehehe.
Very good in wording. It makes for a good prosaic essay than does a poem, but I think you could place a few lines to reflect it in the end.
Something like
"Albeit for lunch
I'd hardly know beyond
what mistakes could be made
'tween the street... and the pond." A ditty. Yes. Take it..lol.
Enjoyed!!!!
Warmly, CookieZeal/Dianne
Welcome to AllPoetry!
How creative. It is very different. I could feel the pain being poured out to this page. I see something authentic as well.With some tweaking, it could shape and shine.
Misspell/typos-
there's
"thought" a worthless -I'm sure you meant 'though'
"on day lover and settled down
but he wrote" -- ?