- Last seen on Jan 16 10:49 PM 2008. Member since November 20, 2006.
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Thoughts bloom in a meadow. I pick one from the ground. It wilts between my forefingers.
I bend down to pick another. A tsunami of brown approaches from the distance.
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on The Cake by Daniel Bush, on January 8, 2007Thank you very much for your insightful reply. I'm glad you had as much fun reading it as I did writing it.
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on Bored in Spanish by dolphingal, on January 5, 2007The rhyming abab scheme is somewhat consistent, as is the rhythm, except in the fourth line. It feels like you were at a loss for words in that part, and had to hastily fill in a few more words in order to make it rhyme "right." Maybe you could change the wording a little.
