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I was at a large family gathering recently, watching a televised sporting event with my teen-aged nephew. This young man, who is mentally challenged but quite inquisitive, was asking about some of the weeks top news stories: - Brochure for a new business at allpoetry
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The fog rolled in like Borkum Riff from a cheap straw pipe,
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on Acid Rain by E A Collins, on August 18, 2005
Stream of thought
Interesting that this feels like a stream of consciousness write. Each word was carefully selected and place ( and replaced, over and again). I guess it is a good thing that it feels original, as that means I avoided cliche phrasing. That is a big goal in all my writes. We have so many great words to use and abuse, why resort to “old hash” ( that is an obscure cliche, with a really weird double meaning). I wanted to avoid breaks on this short of a write, but I will play with your idea. Perhaps it would make the poem seem longer, or help clarify some metaphors.
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