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Foiled

  • Last seen on Oct 1 2:36 PM. Member since July 8.
  • My mood is , and quote is "finish with life".
  • I am a 16 year old guy (Canada)
  • I have 3 comments, 5 archived poems

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  • rhianon on July 13
    i relate to this poem, i like it when u said 'you are my drug' i feel that is a perfect way to get it across, xxx
  • skipeople : welcome to SP! on July 8
    Glad to chat, help, or be ignored. Which ever may flip your pancakes!

    Ashley =]

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  • on Aftermath by Bailiwick, on July 15

    Awesome

    I loved this poem. It shows you inner character with dealing with this loss. I feel your pain. Your opening sentence is great and it sums your pain up entirely.

    "our guts woven together like macrame
    under our twitching, fickle heart--
    in front of our only feeble spine"

    I loved this,it was so dark yet peaceful in an almost forgiveful kind of way.

    . Rewarded 6

  • on i just cant change the way i feel by rhianon, on July 13
    hey, your writing shows some potential but you need to work on it. You really need to try to cut out the slang words and such. but otherwise you did a pretty good job.


    - Jonny