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Hi Friends,

 

I hope to make some good friends here and post some good poetry for your entertainment.

 

My favorite is dark poetry in free-style form, although I do like to experiment with everything from classical forms to the off-beat.

 

I take critical feedback very well because I realize one can only get better by seeing his faults.

 

I used to play guitar, semi-pro baseball and do giant slalom skiing, but a few injuries cut my athletic carreer short and now with rather limited movement, I'm trying to be a good poet.

 

I live in Potomac Maryland 

 

Please drop by and visit me often.

"A kiss is a lovely trick, designed by nature, to stop words when speech becomes superfluous."
--Ingrid Bergmen

  • Member since January 2, 2008.
  • My mood is , and quote is "Go for it!".
  • I am a man from Maryland (United States)
  • When I'm not writing, I'm Designing computer systems.
  • I support the site as a gold member
  • I have 92 comments, 124 archived poems, 2 poems

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    shining on white blossoms, twinned
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Guest Book

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  • Vivacious Bre : Glad to be friends. on March 12, 2009
    I am glad to be friends with you too.
  • Truthful Sinner on March 3, 2009
    hey man i got to admit ur poetry is interestin
  • Winter Wolf on December 24, 2008
    I just wanted to stop by to say. hope you have a great christmas and get a lot of love :] have a good one and have good holidays ^^
  • Winter Wolf on December 4, 2008
    No problem anytime my dear friend you are always welcome :] but I am not always on here I am mostly on allpoetry =]

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Comments

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  • on The Cub Dreams of You by Iorek, on January 2, 2009

    Excellent

    Very warm and tender. The first stanza invites us in so nicely and bids us stay. The idea is great and the way you developed it was
    great, excellent metaphors.
    This is a real keeper.
    Thanks for sharing.

    The title, fist and last line could not be improved IMHO
    Perfect as is.

    Rich

    language: 5, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 5.

  • on Falling Away by Iorek, on January 1, 2009

    Excellent!

    One of the better poems I have read. You made your point to me. I'm not sure that you couldn't have conveyed it with fewer words, although I did enjoy them!?
    Some questions that I'm probably not smart enough to answer for myself:
    1-I didn't understand how "my life long custom" relates to the rest of that stanza
    2- Is grey vapour the English Friend(London fog type of thing?)
    3-I didn't understand stanza three and four
    And PLEASE PLEASE! Explaint the difference between poetry and Beat poetry. What is the MAGIC ingredient that permits one to read it and recognize it as beat? How does one go about learnng how to write beat poetry. I am extremely interested. Please help.

    Cheerio my friend,

    Rich