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Gypsymuse

  • Last seen on Oct 1 10:14 PM. Member since April 1.
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My Poetry

  • The Euphoric A.M. Writer
    In the darkness my weary mind / Contemplates the process of wasted time / Fragments shift within a blurry extreme, / Lengthening the spectrum of reality / / Caffeine convulsions begin to twinkle out / / The clock ticks / With an echo
    235 words, July 23
  • Chocolate Icecream
    / Chocolate ice cream / Like cool crisp mud that’s sweet to taste / / Tantalizing those senses within my tongue / A provoking delight to devour at full sight / / My lips pucker, within close contact, / As I open wide for this frozen ple
    112 words, July 23
  • Long Necks
    A chiseled frown seeks friendship / Down at the bottom of a bottle / Through its consumed fuel / A long cracked neck, / The vessel penetrates a dry hoarse throat / Thirsty for the hammering liquid / As it pulsates the mind, then numbs the b
    132 words, 1 comment, April 15

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  • on The Love Poem of Mr. Hyde by Windhover, on September 15

    This is almost good

    I like the everything but like the last five lines. I feel like everything was connected well except for those last lines.

  • on Everybody Uses Everybody by dave ochs, on September 15

    This is missing

    I feel that you tried to write a long poem, but fell short of words, vocabulary that could have fed this poem. The poem was left like bread with cheese only and not meat for the sandwich, I was left hungry hoping for more.