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Keaton Banks

Hey guys! I'm Keaton. I'm a poet from lower canada. You may refer to me as High Overlord, Master, Afro Stan, Longjohn or Keaton.

Should you enjoy my poetry I impolore you to tell me so. If you want a review, I am also happy to give those out.

Have fun on my page, but if you break it you buy it.

-High Overlord Banks.

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  • on The titanic disaster by celticsoul, on January 15, 2009

    Great!

    It's not often one can sum up my fear of the water so articulately, and I applaud you for your capability of it. Of course, no poem is ever perfect yet this is very near my friend. The one paragraph that bothered me was:

    Tears ran down my cheeks,
    Listening to all the crying of the people..
    but the air was full mostly of the wailing of the dying.

    With what I've seen of the rest of your poetry I think that this could easily be re-written, some general suggestions would be:

    Tears streamed down cheeks unfeeling
    Lost ears catching wisps of the dying wails
    The air thick as a maelstrom with their gasps

    Of course, you are a different poet than I. I would suggest working a bit on the general flow of that one part.

    Great poem!

    Ten sinking ships out of ten!

  • on The Christmas Surprise by Brian Balzer, on January 15, 2009

    Amazing.

    It is at these rare times I can find a poem so simply put and blunt that I am floored with it's genius. Infact, I am quite pleased with this piece and wonder where the inspiration came from. If I could sum up any constructive criticism, I'd say the formatting might be a little easier to read if put into seperate paragraphs. Other than that I can find no wrong with it.

    Five hunks of fine cheese out of five