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Kevan

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I'm a member of Allpoetry, Storywrite and Alljournal.
I am also a site activity leader on StoryWrite and a Greeter on Alljournal.

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  • I've seen 78 of 239 films.
    SUPPOSEDLY if you've seen over 85 films, you have no life. Mark the ones you've seen. There are 239 films on this list. Copy this list, go to your own alljournal account, paste this as a journal. Then, put x's next to the films you've seen, add them up, change the title adding your number, and click submit at the bot
    July 28, 2009, 1,300 words. → 2 comments, Add one?
  • In the Works
    Just a few things I've been working on, and how they're going: 1 Fifteen Chapters currently finished. Link: http://storywrite.com/list/show/38434 2 Very new. Only one chapter currently completed. More very soon. Link: http://storywrite.com/list/38766-Brody 3 Thank you all for your support. Very
    July 28, 2009, 100 words. → Make first comment?
  • Adult: Would you rather?
    June 29, 2009, In Adult, Survey.  400 words. → 3 comments, Add one?

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  • on Breathe by Kevan, on June 7, 2009
    Thank you so much for the great critique.

    My rhyming stuff is older - like, 3-4 years old. I don't think I've written a rhyming poem in a long time, but some of my more recent ones might be okay.

    I think I might post some more of my free-writes up here, because personally, I don't really feel like I tried very hard with my rhyming ones, and I also don't feel like I care about them enough to edit them.

    The funny thing about this one is that I only recently realized I like it. I don't remember writing it with the intention of calming the reader, but I do remember I was really inspired. Maybe that's why it played out so well.

    Again, thank you for your critique. I'll probably use your suggestions when I archive it.

    Kevan.

  • on Wreck by Arielgreen, on June 7, 2009
    Oh my,

    I really wish you would expand this. It could be so much more beautiful and full of imagery, if only it was longer. One part that I know you could make stronger is the middle of this, by adding something. Not sure what though...

    Great job,
    Kevan.