All bad poetry springs from genuine feeling - Oscar Wilde
- Last seen on Dec 4 9:41 PM 2008. Member since August 6, 2005.
- I am a 20 year old woman from Georgia (United States)
- When I'm not writing, I'm A horrible warning.
- I have 22 comments, 1 column, 5 archived poems
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Spread yourself beneath the tree / and wait- / There is a certain continuity / in this posture, this splayed / and marked passivity. / - /74 words, 4 comments, March 16, 2008. In Ideas, Emergences
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Morning came down heavy
Low clouds - Column: Curiosity and Confusion at sharepoetry
I'm sure this could be a lively discussion if everyone would have a look, please, come in, throw me to the ropes, kick my ideas in the stomach. If I'm broken in the process, well, the devil's cure to me. - Dark Hour Thoughts of Callahan and Eleanor at allpoetry
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on untitled by , on May 3, 2008holy crap why would someone even try this? i mean, really if ur gonna plagerize do something a little less well known :-P


I am undecided on my feelings toward the stylistic shifts, (ie how you changed format and rhythm every two stanzas) I like it on one hand, it breaks the poem up and the like stanza are also the ones that are topically similar. On the other hand because this was relativly short its a trifle jarring.
The first two stanzas had the neatest, tightest feeling, and I enjoyed the meter of them. Also i particularly liked the partial/slant rhymes. Very nice
Also, two lines that made me stop and think "what?" were: "but friends open doors" and "as is love" they seem like fragments accidnetally left over from discarded ideas. It may just be that I'm missing certain nuances of the poem (I am very tired) but they do strike me as out of place tonally.
Liked it very much on the whole. Anything about the ocean catches my interest. Beautiful image
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