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Lake Absence

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  • Goodbye.
    28 words, 7 comments, January 1

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  • Kira Black on December 18, 2008
    Beautful page.
    Blessed Be
    ~Starla~
  • Fastlane2121 : Hello Lake! on November 3, 2008
    What's up girl? Just stopped by to say hello!
  • skipeople : O.O I think I love you on October 26, 2008
    O.O I think the title says it all

    Ashley
  • courage is hope : Love your page! on October 13, 2008
    Love your background!!

    Ha ha that was random, but I was bored.

    Please post more poems!
    Hope

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  • on " Dad " by bigcoolyo, on December 22, 2008

    I agree with rhetorica.

    If you want to use words that aren't in your typical vocabulary, you should at least make sure they are spelled correctly. The Add Poem feature contains a spellcheck, although I find Microsoft Word's spell check is better, and then of course you can always check yourself. =] I think the poem would actually have a better effect on the reader if you don't try to use the more complex words and use simpler words...It'll add a sense of innocence that would be appropriate with your content.

    . Rewarded 6

  • on Silence by bigcoolyo, on December 22, 2008

    Some families are dysfuctional, but I'm always here!

    This has some serious potential, but it needs a little editing..Smooth out the edges, you know? Anyways, I hope you don't mind, but I've made some changes that I think will really help your poem.

    A feeling
    always comes to me
    a feeling of
    ever-lasting thought

    I don't quite
    understand life
    But my soul keeps saying,
    "It's better to be silent..."

    Sometimes, this soul
    is right
    I agree
    I disagree

    I don't know why
    but 'ilence is ab
    Everlasting Breath

    You might not
    understand me
    You might not even
    notice me-
    But I want to be alone

    When I'm going
    to die



    For everyone,
    they'll feel like it
    Never happened..

    Hope I didn't impose...Well, I know I did, but I hope you don't mind! Feel free to completely ignore this. =]