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Liz Anne Lawrence

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  • on funny how a circle goes by Lad, on January 30, 2007

    Love this!

    I love the (slightly sardonic) subject and your number games! You hold to the trinity in each 4 line verse. (I have forgotten what you call it.) You begin each with a round even number that represents a decade's worth of trying and plying different approaches to life and religion - always ending with some sort of trinity, and always rendered in four lines. If I were to do an explication of your poem, for, say, Modern American Poetry, I'd emphasize that your trinity is always set with four lines, suggesting something more than the trinity - a fourth and final part. I'd go off on that and no telling what I'd come up with!

    Otherwise, this poem is a lot of fun. It's one of those where you knod your head when you read it, like ummm hmmm, but you also have to smile, like ummm hmmm. My favorite verse is the last one, "the Mystery/of What. Was. Is." I love the way you punctuated it, and that it's numberless, ageless, beyond the trinity, beyond the four lines. If the four lines point to something more than the trinity, the last verse (last line) points to something more than four. It's magically done. Perhaps you didn't intend all those nuemonics, but they came through to me and I really enjoyed it.

    Numbers show up in many of your poems. Any reason? Perhaps that's the next paper I'll write!
    Liz

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  • on An Ever Defiant Poet Remarks To a Tree by Lad, on January 28, 2007

    Indeed!

    Your first verse has that Kerouac spin, which I like so much. I DO like the concentrated form with lots of syllables spun on snow... I like that the tree is fixed, appearing as you see it, how it was in the dark ages, in the mid-east. Even through the whirlwind & the reckless wind, the tree has rooted and remains fixed. The last verse is lovely. I need to think about it some. Your poem evokes a little mystery woven into its scattery lace. I very much enjoyed this. Love your fine imagery!
    Liz

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