- Last seen on Aug 9 1:11 PM. Member since August 30, 2006.
- I am a 43 year old man from Kansas (United States)
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- A Rant In The Muse's Absence at allpoetry
Is that the best you have, / This Hallmark drivel? / Prose haphazardly cut into slices / As though words were your cows / And you a drunken butcher? / / For shame, you squealer of old lam
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Your third stanza is it
Hi, Ash. I haven't checked you out for quite a while. Thought maybe I'd give you a break from me for a bit. Now to bidness...I like the poem. Angst and all. I like it because you drew the thoughts together so well at the end. I especially like how and where you broke the lines in the third stanza. I don't believe the third stanza could have been constructed in any other fashion and remain as strong and impactful as it is. I still believe that you are possessed of a mighty talent, and I'm still proud of you for the work you do. Write on, homepie, write on.
My God
Here you have accomplished everything I ever thought and knew that you could. I am so proud of you. This is Absolute.