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  • HER: Chapter 4 at storywrite
    (It seems I cannot see, it seems I cannot talk, and doing anything else makes something hurt me so? Am I 'dead'? What is 'dead'? Oh, what s
  • Her: Chapter 3 at storywrite
    She was still under her covers. He pondered a moment about how peaceful that mess of wrinkled blanket and girl seemed.
  • HER: Chapter 2 at storywrite
    “Eh?! But... but... you're disgusting!!” another one of the soldiers spoke out after a pause..

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  • on Lifes Image by AprilRosedw, on February 23, 2009
    Written like a true story of coming to age. Not in a literal sense, but mentally. Very beautiful.

    In my opinion, the flow is a bit awkward at the beginning, but it gets very nice as the poem goes on. Such appreciation for the simple nuances of life is applaudable.

    language: 4, rhythm: 4, subject: 4, tone: 5, form: 4.

  • on To all the pervs by Miss O Malley, on February 22, 2009
    ...I hate you. You said what I wanted to say better than I could say it.