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Maybe it's rough,
but to be considered tough,
is what I am looking for.
To be the first one(s) in;
and the last one(s) out,
is a sacrafice I'm willing to take.
To do it all again,
for our country, for you,
it's the will power and the heart,
that will pull me through.

Thank you all for being so wonderful!!! I missed you all! Support your troops!!! GOD BLESS!!!

US MARINES!!! SEMPER FI!!!


To Dave Ochs:
Thank you sincerly for always being there! There's not enough I can say to thank you. Even a gazzillion times I could never say how much I appreciate the friendship and the guiding hand you have lent to me! Again thank you!

To all of you!!!!:
For supporting my poetry and just being wonderful! You guys have become like a second family and I can't wait to see what each of you have posted! I enjoy getting to talk to with all of you and reading your poetry brightens my day! Thank you all, for also supporting me in my decision to join the Marines!!! I really appreciate that you haven't "downed" it!!!

To Jack:
Thanks for helping me during my toughest writers block! You gave me something new to write about and I want
to take the time to help you recognize that you, yourself are a talented writer and should join us all.

To David C.S.:
These last six months have been incredible! I wish you only knew how much I wish I could repay you for everything you've done for me!

  • Member since March 8, 2007.
  • I am a woman from Pennsylvania (United States)
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  • on You were great by dave ochs, on May 19, 2008
    This poem drew me in from the start! Your lines are all deep, pointing out the horrid way the world has lived in an a secret 'underworld' of violence and hate. And this purtrays that very truth. But what exactly drives a person to be a cold blooded 'beast'? We could ask William Golding but would he truly know. His first novel, Lord of the Flies, purtrays violence,vengence and murder between children. Is when we are taking from the enviornments we were so keen on living in? Adolph Hitler wasn't. Im in the Marines, as you know, and Ive been 'out of my element' and environment and I have NEVER had a thought,tendency,or undying urge to kill someone. I kill because I was trained too. I kill because I protect my fellow Americans as well as the whole USA. I do not think that we will ever truly know what drives a person to absolute insanity or into a cold blooded murder. This poem, spoke as true events unfold before us. Will do anything? If some of these events re-occur will we be prepared? What will do different? What will America do to stop it? The saying goes "History repeats itself". I suppose we're heading for the 'Great Depression' but what about Hitler or Pearl Harbor. Look at the War on Iraq?!

    Great poem David, another classic winner from you. I loved this. Drew me in from the first line! Way to go ol' friend! Keep up the good work....Can't wait to read more
    Brooklyn

  • on Sir, Yes Sir by dave ochs, on March 27, 2008

    DAVID!!!!

    You knew this would catch my attention!!! So I would read it?! But anyways Dave this is strong and extremly powerful! I enjoyed this. Yes, some of ours lives were taken however, there are a few of us who slipped from the death's grip. While reading this it was very "emotional" for me. With me still being active (duty), it struck me. Actually, to be truthful with you it struck me hard, as well as deep. This poem definatly should be dedicated to all who's lives were lost and those who are struggling to keep it! This poem has an intriguing poem. It truly did draw me in, and hopefully that was what you were looking/aiming for. If so you deserve extraordinary props!!! I congratulate you! I hope that after writing this poem, and going through the multiple ups and downs and experiences in the service, this too has touched you in some form.
    To be honest with you this poem was great, however I was unaware of the negitive outcome!!! Good job though!

    By the way what you do mean you didn't date yourself?

    Brooklyn