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NorayRada

-I love soccer

-I'm a rhyming junky.

-Not "cool" but socially awkward enough to be "semi-cool"

-Trumpet's the greatest instrument on the planet. I don't care what you say. And of course I relize I'm prejudiced. Oh, by the way, sax's the second best, followed by all other band instruments, then cello, then rest of strings. Vocal chords aren't instruments, they're the #2 body part (1st is the brain... duh).

  • Last seen on Oct 28 9:29 PM 2007. Member since October 26, 2007.
  • I am a 16 year old person (United States)
  • When I'm not writing, I'm I'm a part-time DJ. When I'm not playing soccer, doing homework, sleeping or recycling I'm thinking of stuff to write and writing stuff..
  • I have 4 comments, 4 archived poems

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  • on The City by Siaynoq, on October 28, 2007
    Well, it's no wonder what your point is. Your wording is perfect for the subject, lots of good imagery. Even myself, a person who has no problem with cities, grew to dislike the very idea.
    One thing: the 3rd paragraph needs some work in my opinion. Words like "exotic", "bedazzle", "glinting", and "chrome" give the feeling of wonderment and awe, not disgust and dislike. If you changed it then it would give that much more to the meaning.
    I really liked it.

  • on The Trumpet Man by NorayRada, on October 28, 2007
    Thank you! Exactly the point I was trying to get across. Oh, and thanks for the charisma bit. I think I might just squeeze that in somewhere.