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I'm pretty new to this poetry lark, never having coined anything more than a romantic poem for my other half at Birthdays and Valentine's days, but a certain someone who is very close to me asked me to write something to win a competition, which I did. Now I am the proud AP Hubby of CinDiLiCious---, having fought hard to get her!

My Family:

Wifey: The delectable, delicious CinDiLiCious---
http://sharepoetry.com/user/show/CinDiLiCiouS----
a wonderful poetess, in both romantic and erotic poetry
a wonderful person
my muse
my W.I.F.E.Y.
Between us we share a bond that will not easily be broken. Our daily chats are some of the most imporatant words in my life - she helps keep me sane!

  • Last seen on Jul 4 3:16 AM. Member since January 3.
  • I am a 44 year old guy (Scotland)
  • When I'm not writing, I'm ignoring the ignorant who judge with little or no knowledge.
  • I have 39 comments, 4 archived poems

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  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy : Welcome to the world of poetry........... on January 9
    You already know how much I admire you story writing and yes now I admire your poetry

    I am glad you are having a go at poetry cause it's a wonderful world to be a part of

    I realise this site here doesn't do the whole family thing, but I simply don't care what anyones opinion is. When you were already a part of my family on AP and SW then it's simple.Your a part of my family on here and your my Hubby....
    People can choice to take that how they like, but know it is all in fun....

    Anyway Hubby. I look forward to exploring the world of poetry and I hope I can continue to be your muse like you are one of mine


    CIn

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  • Vast improvement, increased visuality, better flow and rhythm to the whole piece. What made you want to re-write it in the first place?



    J

  • This is a cosy piece, it engenders warm fuzzy feelings, memories that everyone has of their childhood and youth.

    About our dad's telling us (in lecture tones) exactly the right way to do things - not that we followed the "right way" - we always had to find our own! It took us years to identify the fact that our dad's were right all along!

    About times with friends, drinking more than was good for us, but creating memories that would last a lifetime.

    A beautiful piece, and thanks for the memories it created.



    J