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RAWright

Live for those you love--Love for those who live.

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  • Un voto de Sincerety
    Virtud y sabiduría de toda la creación / / Lléveme a ese lugar en donde todas las cosas reclinan eterno / / Mi amor es ilimitado ahora / Mis palabras--hablado sinceramente / En su nombre mis vidas del corazón
    36 words, October 10
  • Song Beneath the Wings
    That sunny afternoon--minds collecting / Our bodies scaled the mountainslope / / The Organs breathed a song so deep / The hawk climbed high to hear it / / And I perching on / A boulder / Bald and flightless / / Remained a stone
    133 words, September 28
  • The Passing Alteration
    Heaving / The breath is butchered from / Her catostrophic perulity / / Salvation situated upon the fruit of some / Unripened apparition /
    66 words, 4 comments, September 3

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  • on last words by Lad, on September 15
    That's a really cool short poem. The style keeps things interesting. I read it and it felt very "crisp" if you know what i mean. I don't really know how else to describe it.

    I've always been meaning to ask you this Lad but who is that a picture of as your profile pic? Haha strange that I don't know after all this time.

  • on The Passing Alteration by RAWright, on September 15

    Thanks for the review Brian

    Alteration was meant as change so the title is really, "A Passing Change" The poem is really about an interaction between two people.
    Perulity means immaturity and it was late when i wrote this so it may be misproperly used grammatically speaking but i think its right.
    I meant callow as describing something sickly.
    Come to think of it after re-reading the poem after your prostitution comment
    I found that to be kind of true. I wasn't litterally writing about prostitution but I was thinking along the lines of a certain individual selling herself short and just trying to appease other people for some shallow reward...prostitution in a way perhaps.

    Intersting how other people reveal so much that you don't realize in your own work.

    Thanks a ton for reviewing this once again. I appreciate your insight.