At the beginning, referring to "the end", being related with dust, which is what all being eventually return to, and soil, at the end of the poem. Soil being where we are buried, as well as being considered almost the same as that with dust.
Another connection being:
"but my heart, it is as
good as done; a popular rush."
Likely coincides with:
"and decades blur into one another."
This connection makes it seem as if the past decades have been such a rush that they blur in one at this particular moment in time.
Not only this, but also:
"Tried to give you the truth
too fast and you wanted it slow."
Fits perfectly with the heart/rush theme.
Another connection here I seem to catch is:
"to swim in; lose yourself"
and
"I'll welcome you in,
see all your sight stands to allow"
It's as if you link your pupils being large enough to swim in, or lose yourself, as to the entrance of being welcomed in, and to see what makes you, you. And, in essence, doing this should make one lose themselves.
Overall, I get a detached and near-morbid feel from this, with a tickle of compassion for the present, and all events otherwise negative leading up to this moment.
You have 2 extremities themed here as well, love and death, as well as comparing slow and fast.
Though, there are probably a few words that could be changed, perhaps moved, and some added?
"Hello, I used to have
instruments speak for my composure.
Hello, I once composed my tears."
This seems repititious using compose/composure so closely, and the third line stands out, it needs another line after it, linking the comment about tears as to perhaps why, or a more accuracy feeling as to why?
Still quite lovely, especially taking 2 different articles and combining them and somehow weaving them together.
At the beginning, referring to "the end", being related with dust, which is what all being eventually return to, and soil, at the end of the poem. Soil being where we are buried, as well as being considered almost the same as that with dust.
Another connection being:
"but my heart, it is as
good as done; a popular rush."
Likely coincides with:
"and decades blur into one another."
This connection makes it seem as if the past decades have been such a rush that they blur in one at this particular moment in time.
Not only this, but also:
"Tried to give you the truth
too fast and you wanted it slow."
Fits perfectly with the heart/rush theme.
Another connection here I seem to catch is:
"to swim in; lose yourself"
and
"I'll welcome you in,
see all your sight stands to allow"
It's as if you link your pupils being large enough to swim in, or lose yourself, as to the entrance of being welcomed in, and to see what makes you, you. And, in essence, doing this should make one lose themselves.
Overall, I get a detached and near-morbid feel from this, with a tickle of compassion for the present, and all events otherwise negative leading up to this moment.
You have 2 extremities themed here as well, love and death, as well as comparing slow and fast.
Though, there are probably a few words that could be changed, perhaps moved, and some added?
"Hello, I used to have
instruments speak for my composure.
Hello, I once composed my tears."
This seems repititious using compose/composure so closely, and the third line stands out, it needs another line after it, linking the comment about tears as to perhaps why, or a more accuracy feeling as to why?
Still quite lovely, especially taking 2 different articles and combining them and somehow weaving them together.