I am not a particularly interesting person. I don't feel that I have any outstanding talents, but I'm a decent artist and singer. I love to write poetry, and have since about the 6th grade. I only have my newest work here, but if you wanna read something older, you can visit me at http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/author.html?id=108119 .
I feel that there's no point in reviewing poetry if you're not going to be honest, but also honesty does not have to be harsh. So please, write every last word you feel is appropriate when critiquing my poetry. If it's bad, say it.
I feel that there's no point in reviewing poetry if you're not going to be honest, but also honesty does not have to be harsh. So please, write every last word you feel is appropriate when critiquing my poetry. If it's bad, say it.
- Last seen on Aug 17 4:51 PM. Member since June 9.
- I am a 19 year old woman (United States)
- When I'm not writing, I'm creating random graphic art for someone....
- I have 7 comments, 3 archived poems
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Bailiwick : Hey, another mittenfolk on June 15I live in Mt. Pleasant, at the moment. I'm an English major at CMU. What are you studying in Kalamazoo?
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on Breaking Your Heart by oxymoron270, on June 13
Not bad.
Beside a few cliches such as "take a hike", etc. it wasn't bad. I noticed the meter was off in places, which made the lines feel kinda jumpy, and a lot of the rhymes were forced sounding. By that I mean in some stanzas, for example the second to last, it seems like you reworded the second line to make sure you could rhyme. In some places, you used words that would rhyme when it seemed like you didn't originally connect with those words or use them in the first place. Does that make any sense?
But on the flip side, I like the idea for the poem, personally I don't come across poems with this subject very often, nor do I think about it often, either. And a lot of the ideas and thoughts behind each stanza were very true and deserved to be written. I suppose that comes with two years of thinking about a subject, though...Umm..lol...what I'm saying is if you polish it a bit, this gem would be more ready to be sold by a jeweler.
. Rewarded 8
Impressive.
I LOVE your metaphors/similies/etc. The imagery is great. Honestly the only thing I didn't like was the "form", because I'm a strict capitalize-every-first-line's-letter kinda person. And I realize that's completely personal preference. Otherwise, the only weak point I saw was the opening line. Well, technically it was the first two lines, but one sentence. It didn't draw me in, but the Hindu-god idea was amazing for catching interest.But I can't complain about this piece of art because I really do love it.