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Fellow AP and SP members,
I write mostly dark poems /and or poems about teen issues/. I have gotten many comments on my "dark" peoms, saying that I should cheer up, for say, and I am. I am happy...now. I write about my past. It's how I get over it... I'm not going to hide it, but I'm not going to flaunt it either(if in your mind me posting my cut poems all over the internet 'flaunting', then my bad) but there are some poems on here that aren't dark. Comment on all that you want please. Tell me what you like, what you don't, or what you think could make my poem/poetry better. Thank you.


TWS



Rest In Peace
Michael Botten, My Loving father
02/18/1974 - 01/09/2007




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  • on Tears and Rain by , on February 3, 2007

    Fantastic

    Absolutely beautiful!
    This is a very great piece. Welcome to SP!
    I love the imagery in this as well as the
    emotional grasp that it has on the reader.
    At first I was thinking, what in the world
    is going on with these stanzas...?! But
    then as the poem went on, I realized that
    it worked very well for the poem. Nice fit!
    Very nice job. And again, welcome.



    T.W.S.

  • on [ It's like a plate, freshly washed ] by HopeWouldNeverFail, on February 3, 2007

    Damn...

    wow. this is really good. i like the analogy
    in the beginning. i wouldnt change a thing!
    Great job