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"Follow the raven into the shadow, and you will find the light..."


Imagine a stage set with the lamps of 10,000 past actors. Each embrace their own character, making a graceful plight towards the peak of blandish awe. Now imagine yourself as each of those 10,000 actors. Good, now you've entered the vault of my mind.

Now that we have that aspect of my strangeness semi-clarified, I shall introduce myself. The name is Jarred. Most call me by the idiom-based nickname 'Synith' I recommend you do the same. You might as well become a nonconformist anyway.

Since this is a 'Who are you' box, I'll list a few things I enjoy doing (hopefully not to the point of liver-vomiting verboseness...) I enjoy acting a lot: I'm more so interested in comedies, since I do relish in making people smile. Hopefully, some half-witted agent will one day see me, and cast me for some big TV show. If not, I'll fight with one hell of a might to get on TV. If all else fails, I'll either do standup comedy, or Teach English. Which brings be to my second interest: literature.

I love writing. I mostly dab hand in poetry. As you may be thinking to yourself, "Oh yay! another teen writer. His work sucks." Well that's nice of you to have an opinion, but I do not think of myself as 'another cliché writer.' I take my work incredibly serious. There are very few writers my age that actually make my brow raise. If you're at all the literary type, I'll appreciate you checking out my work: http://synith.deviantart.com/. I also enjoy photography. Though, I don't take it as seriously as I do with my writing, I do enjoy capturing nature and random objects I see about the sky and house. Again, to see my work: http://synith.deviantart.com/

I also play piano and guitar. I'm in two bands: Calamitous and Shadowbox in Silence. Since I can't fit my whole life onto the page, feel free to add me or message me. Cheers.


-Synith.

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  • on The Real Use of Computers by Terry-too, on May 30, 2006

    Interesting

    Indeed, I did like this read. I like the overall message you convey, as well as your word choice.

    The only thing I can criticize about it is your rhyming scheme. To me, it got tiresome to have the same type of words rhyming together. Mostly the 'oar' and 'r' endings.

    However, since you did that, I found the quote by E.A Poe at the end to be worth the redundancy.

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  • on Terror in the dark by shyam balaji, on March 25, 2006
    Interesting penning. You have many of the things that make a poem, a poem.

    -Story
    -Imagry

    and so on..

    The only thing I could say I didnt like about this was the overall sound/rhythm.. or tone of the piece. You gave your point quite well, but theirs a fine like between dicription and flow.. You seemed to follow just the discription.

    St. 1
    "During a dark dense quiet night
    cloudy moonless day's dim light,
    I saw the most horror frightened sight."

    That desribes a lot - however the line 'cloudy moonless day's dim light' Doesnt give it a wavey feel..  While your other line: 'Howling of crafty fox at yonder, sodden by cold rain's thunder' works pretty well.

    Another thing I noticed was your rhyming sequence. In some parts you used full end rhyme, or off end rhyme.. 'Tree, see.... Tree breeze' I found that to bring down the tone of the piece.

    I think you have a great story here, all that needs to be done is revising it.

    Best of luck to you. And keep writing!

    -Synith

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