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Trellis

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  • on Endings by Lad, on May 28, 2007
    I just came to the end of one of the longest endings in my life. (There was one other that was longer, but it was of a different nature).

    This poem dances that last dance with grace - also tears.

    I've never read you before. Glad I sauntered by.

    Crissy

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  • on First Meeting(hybridanelle in the works) by , on August 25, 2005

    Looks very good to me!

    I’m not familiar with this form – I’m a novice poet. But the rhyming pattern looks well executed. (I’, curious – I’ll have to look up the form and find out why the pattern is different from lines 7 thru 12, and again from lines 31 thru 38). Also, I don’t know if this is supposed to have this many stanzas, but it seems a bit lengthy for my taste. For me, when a poem gets to be too long, its starts to lose me. The ones that really grab me are the shorter ones. There could be some redundancy in this piece. I love the subject matter. Its beautiful! And your word selection couldn’t be better. My only concern is the length. But again, that could be what is required for a hybridanelle – I’m not sure. Great job! You’ve always been one of my favorite poets on AP!

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