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Willow1818

  • Last seen on Nov 4 11:21 PM. Member since September 30, 2007.
  • My mood is , and quote is "Hit a great garage sale today!".
  • I am a 50 year old person
  • I have 21 comments, 1 archived poem

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  • Leaves
    There are always days and nights during the fall / The autumn / When Mother Nature decides / Enough is Enough / And She shakes her head bac
    242 words, 3 comments, January 21. Reward
  • Hamlet Was Right
    / / / Retirement / / / (Or; Hamlet was right.) / / / / / I need to plan / / / to go out / / / each day. / / / It's not like work / / / Where I have to go. / / / And yet / /
    259 words, 1 comment, December 22, 2007. In Life questions

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  • on Moonstone, Opal, Tiger’s Eye, Jade by celestialpie, on August 23

    WOW!

  • on Forms Of Happiness by dave ochs, on August 23

    Very Good

    WOW! Skynard's "Smell of Death" is here!
    I really got twisted reading this. Which is a good thing. Addicts are always looking for that one perfect high: the very first high they ever had which is why they're addicts to begin with. The speaker is so optimistic ("better yet") and then dumps the reader on his/her ass at the end. I like that because it is in that way the real message comes through. I was twisted at the beginning and untwisted by the ending. Way to go!
    Grammatically, second to last stanza get rid of "things" and just change "were" in the last stanza to "we're" and it's done!
    Thanks for sharing this

    . Rewarded 8