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  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy : Welcome to Sharepoetry Zacha :) on April 10, 2008
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  • on untitled by , on April 10, 2008

    Wow

    Though grammatically incorrect in places, the emotional depth is so AMAZING. Your use of language is certainly appealing, and the story is significant to many. You use figurative language well, alliteration and metaphors being prominent. The contrast between the use of "Father" and "daddy" is like a softening of heart over time. I don't know if that was deliberate, but it is noticeable.

    language: 5, rhythm: 3, subject: 5, tone: 4, form: 4.

  • on Missing The Seasons Of Hell by dave ochs, on April 10, 2008

    Sweeet!

    There's a good story in there. I like the enjambment, especially in the final verse. You might have overdone it in places though. But overall, cool!

    language: 2, rhythm: 3, subject: 5, tone: 4, form: 3.