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Algoressister

"It could be worse...it could be raining....." Oh that's right, I'm in Oregon.... and it's winter...

  • Member since November 26, 2007.
  • My mood is , and quote is "your guess is as good as mine".
  • I am a woman from Oregon (United States)
  • When I'm not writing, I'm a Stained glass Artist, Writer.
  • I have 139 comments, 34 archived poems, 61 poems

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  • Pretty Little Daisy on February 1
    Oregon is a beautiful place! Even when it's snowing...

    Imagine being in Iowa with 2-3 feet of snow on the ground (and it still occasionally snows).
  • algoressister : hey on March 7, 2008
    Hi
    all Igot from your message was "hey"?

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  • on My Chair by Miss Tallulah Belle, 1 hour ago
    PS
    Now that I have my wits back.
    A note. You use a comma to separate thoughts in the middle of the line.
    You do not use a period at the end of the line.
    The period would help me read this as much or more than the comma.
    I read it aloud to "My Honey" and the lack of periods, disturbed the flow as I read.
    That would be my only observation on flow.

  • on My Chair by Miss Tallulah Belle, 1 hour ago

    Very, Very....

    Wow,
    Very nice piece. I was a little worried when you took a breath and said more about the chair. But then you very, very, nicely tipped the metaphor a little and let us peek at the home too.
    I liked the way you express a satisfaction that your chair is so much a part of your daily life...and a subtle sadness that his chair is not worn too. Not for yourself, though, for him.
    And the ending was perfectly unexpected.
    That to convert the sadness, you give to him...
    You have no need to sit in his chair... No need to be in his place.
    You recognize his need fully...
    Sh*t I'm crying...
    Seriously, the most coompelling love poem I have read in a very long time.
    The imagery is sublime. So simple, so essential. I could just rub it all over me... the warmth of the sun... kids in the lap.
    Danm! you got me sentimental!

    Beautiful read. Thank you for sharing this work.

    ttfn Laurel

    language: 5, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 4.