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  • craft supplies
    Palms milky like dawn, like eyes in blindness. / / Underneath your skin you harbor / the limbs of numbers like bones, / Air like blood, string veins, / tissue paper lungs. / / And your hands, / these mechanisms made of craft supplies
    55 words, 1 comment, November 15
  • portrait REVISED
    REVISED: / I fill and deflate in time with / piano notes never played / by your long, elegant fingers. / You do not learn through / music
    517 words, 21 comments, November 6. In Personal, Love, Change, Free verse
  • It isn't always so present
    And in this pleasure, / I wilt like the petals we lie on. / / It isn't always so present as flowers are - / as dips of hills, / your bones
    68 words, 6 comments, November 5. In Free verse
  • [Forty years would pass before] REVISED
    Forty years would pass before / I could say your name once every / second, one billion times round. / Someone’s spilled molasses down / our
    184 words, 6 comments, October 30. In Life, Free verse, Society, Thoughts

Guest Book

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  • cee on November 6
    WOW I just love all of your poems!
    Pleasepleaseplease never stop writing!!!!
  • Brian Balzer : PLEASE FORGIVE ME on October 21
    Personally I wouldn't blame you if you never forgive me.
    Let me tell you I can never express how truly sorry I am
    Even as badly as I want to find the words to say it
    And discover some miricale way of making up for it.
    So why am I even trying if I know it's impossible? Because
    Even though I know I don't desrve your forgiveness

    Friends deserve heartfelt apologies if someone has been
    Offensive, even when it was an accident, they should not
    Rationalize it and try to find an excuse to
    Get them off the hook without even trying to tell the other
    Individual how extremely sorry they feel for the
    Very act which was hurtful in a way no one deserves.
    Everyone deserves the truth from their friends.

    Maybe I'll write you a poem, though I don't feel very poetic
    Even though I don't think that could make up for my mistake.
    Author notes
    This was written for Annac after I made the horrible mistake of not realizing that she had written the very first poem anyone had ever written for me...then being a dumbass and telling her that someone else had.

    I wanted to come post my new poem here also. Of course now I feel even worse finding out that I didn't even remember to come sign your guest book after you signed mine in such a wonderful way. I'm so very sorry.
    Hopefully (by some miricale)
    still your friend,
    Brian K. Balzer

  • JennyInTheMirror : Hi!! on March 9
    Love your poems!!Your A Great writer!!!!!!
  • rnoggle1990 : hi on March 5
    i like your poems very much! you are a great writter keep it up

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  • on Americana Part 3 by dearchicago, on November 28
    Still rough, you're right, but this poem wouldn't have the effect it does if it weren't rough, disjointed, matter-of-fact in a way that somewhere suggests metaphor, a moral, and then, letting go of the poetry nonsense - just a record of things, of everything.

    I was about to list all of the lines that make me fall over but then I realized the list contained half of the poem and it might be more efficient to summarize.

    ..I love this. Really and truly, it's great.

    and the titles! The titles make it work.

    If I were to make one criticism, I'd say that the last stanza doesn't really rank with the others. It may be worth tossing, or at least, not ending with. After so much, you need to end with a bang, you know? Or even something painfully simple..a very short chapter perhaps?

  • on Broken Twigs Smashed Berries by marcusmoore, on November 18
    our love is an ICEE flavored sno-cone
    with a bad taste

    Ha! Nice