Bite your tongue until it bleeds,
and choke on the bitter sweet blood
as it engulfs your mouth.
Lay your head on the ground
and allow the filth of deceiving shoes
trample your body and soul.
Turn your back and close your eyes,
that the plunge of a knife,
may easily be embedded within your spine.
Let your eyes moisten with tears,
to hide the spit on your face.
There is no hope,
when wolves dress as lambs.
Nor is there faith,
When love turns to hate.
Love yourself,
and to thine own self be true.
For there is no truth here.
Author notes
I call this cupboards and towels in memory of and idiot ex-boyfriend who only picked fights over stupid things like cupboards and towels.
Please tell me what you think
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I'm glad you explained the title.
I was wondering what connection it would have when I started reading. He would have gotten along well with at least one of my exes. You definitly conveyed the emotions you felt over this person and what he deserved. I take without guessing he was (as are many) a liar. I like your poem. I think your last stanza is my favorite.
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Wow this poem is very rich in emotion yet there's a sense of detachment. I think the last line is perfect and there's something chilling about 'when wolves dress as lambs'. Line 8 provides the only minor problem. 'That the' doesn't seem to work. It may be just the way I'm reading it but I think 'that' could easily be taken away and would make lines 8 & 9 more effective and have a less jarring effect. Otherwise brilliant.
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Revenge is a sweet dish...
...best served cold. And the poem has just the right frigidity to it, LAS; I like it. Serves the jerk right!
I especially like the great poetic technique in the fifth stanza: really sharp and wise lines there.
I think "cubarts" should be "cupboards"? Or is the former spelling common in your part of the world - possibly so. Also, there's a typo in your title.
I enjoyed this poem, all of its vengeful fury.
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Fantastic!!
7,8, and 9 gave me the shivers. I know what was behind this and i couldn,t agree more. Some things are just not forgivable. I think it was well worth waiting for your next poem. Incredible work and look forward to seeing more!
language: 3, rhythm: 4, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 3.
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wow this is execelent
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