when all things pass
our time is done
is the battle
lost or won
when all is lost
when all is gone
the end is near
it won't be long
to this our sad day goes on
with the end near
and everything gone
there is nothing left now to fear
now to the cold days
of long winters past
to this our cold heart
the frailness will last
when the end is decided
decided i will die
to this our sad day
at last i say good by
now it's done
all gone, stone cold
i lie in the ground
memories grow old
i don't remember
how i got here
all i know
is there is much to fear
in the darkness
silence and cold
thoughts of you
nothing to hold
the days drag on
far and wide
nothing around
no where to hide
all is dark
nothing in sight
running around
in search of a light
i will guide you
take you homme
then no longer
will you be alone
there in teh distance
there's somthign there
run away
this life is not fair
there's the light
run fast, almost there
you're free at last
breath the fresh air
now the days drag on
with a little more light
life is good
no longer a fight
now when things go col
remember your free
life will go on
just him and me
do you guys like it?
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the rhyme gets a little too
out of hand in this piece i
think. i dont understand how
the beginning ties in with
the end. it might just be me,
but i jsut don't see it. well
thanks for sharing
language: 3, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 4, form: 5.
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ok here
well you are right with how nothing really ties in but when i wrote it that was my goal. to make no sence but not ramble on and do it quietly.
i is really just how love is. litle changes happen over time and nothing seems to ever make sence. but ty for the comment!
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I like it. It is a wonderful piece of art. Keep writing. I hope to read more...
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thank you for your support. and do not totally think that he is wrong. i just ment for it to make no sence and not tie in. but your comment really helps!
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