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Tears of forgiveness

Missing mom
more than I thought.
We argued
as much as we fought.
She didn't always do
the things she ought.
She knows now the answers
to the questions
I so often sought
Wished I had Loved her then like I Love her now.

Maybe I never could
forgive her.
Cause I didn't
really know how.
Most of the time
I think she understood.
When she didn't
she loved me anyhow.
Wish I had Loved her then like I Love her now.

Never hiding my resentment
always being an asshole.
Never letting her forget.
Spending so much time
being mean.
Is something I'll always regret.
Wished I had Loved her then like I Love her now.

The last time
I saw her
I don't remember
if I told her
I Loved her
befor I left

Can only hope
she hears these words
I've whispered
between the tears of forgiveness
I
finally
wept.
Trueblueliberty

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  • William McGarvey
    February 11, 2007

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    Hi TBL,

    Wow, this is a very powerful poem with a lot of emotionally charged feelings.

    Feelings of regret for hurting a loved one but never really got around to apologizing properly.


    Found a typo on line 32 (before)

    The poem flows beautifully and the repetitious lines work very well here. A very touching poem that almost anyone can easily identify with.

    Bill

  • dave ochs
    February 11, 2007

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    very sweet

    I really liked this the rythem and structure, and the rhyme which I usually don't like, is good in this case case.
    but the best thing is the message...that even though your mom had shortcomings she loved you unconditionally, and you realized perhaps too late that you should have loved her unconditionally.

    through your personal experience we get a universal mode or way of living.
    dave


  • himanshumodi
    February 13, 2007

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    well... one question. Why did YOU weep tears of forgiveness. I mean, for me if anyone ought to be forgiven, its really you. I know what you are trying to say here thought. That you finally got to loving your mum, when it was too late. But the "tears of forgiveness" as a concept does not have a right flow for me. Maybe you could retitle it as "tears of lonliness". Just a suggestion.

    And as far as structure goes, I think it works. It has that choking feel you would get when you try to talk as you cry. Thats good. Having said that, the first stanza does need some rework.

    Lastly, the concept is simple, true and serves as a good reminder to all of us who still have a chance to love their parents


    • trueblueliberty
      February 14, 2007
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      Lucky if you have good parents

      she did alot of things a good mom would never do.she had 4 kids,all ran away at the age of 13.she wasn't the worst mom though either.she showed me how to be a good mom,by what not to do.By the way very seldom do I get bored or lonely.maybe you might read this in a different light,or maybe not.Thanks for the input.
      Tbl