The crew is ready, having me as the head
Counting the seconds to make a start
Talking about cryogenic that makes dead
The heat of the nose of the jet’s front part
Breaking into the sky, probing into the space
Soon after the end of the speedy counts;
A Successful launch - smile on each face -
Have seen from height the tiny looking mounts
Our shuttle travelled a lot, crossed million miles,
I have more to share all explorations made
We landed on the earth with excessive smiles
Galaxies, milky way… alas! All began to fade
Wished to travel faster than light
On the vast sky like a hungry little bird;
Passion, love and desires like a failed flight
Lost the path before starting the tread
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Hi Dear...
Let your dream be a dream...
If not air, water is there...
If not shuttle, ship is there...
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Vivacious and Bubbly!
There are words that seem a little out of place here and there I thought upon first reading, but now I m not so sure Ms Kiddy Oceanic. There is something mildly schizophrenic and charmingly zany about the way you write here.
Our shuttle travelled a lot, crossed million miles,
I have more to share all explorations made
We landed on the earth with excessive smiles
Three great lines. Of course they could be written:
"..crossed millions of miles" etc but your enthusiasm is so evident that it feels like an explorer gasping forth exciting news to avid listeners.
Great fun!
Oops. Just missed you on the chatterbox, Kiddy. Thanx for the welcome back. Missed you likewise!
Warmest regards
gG
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Superb!
Very good Kiddy!
Awesome poem from your light pen.
unrealized dream is pen lit well and beautiful....
Poem moves faster like jet and reference to scientific terms in artistic way is marvelous...
keep writing.
Lolzzzzz
Kinley []
February 21, 2007
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