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innocence, dice and untimely cuts

The gods rolled a dice
we lost, we suffered
innocence cut untimely short

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Dealing with death is hard, a good friend of mine just went through that process, everytime I see him, it pains me inside...

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  • Keaton Banks
    February 28, 2007
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    Me neither, I'm archiving it


  • NewPoet123
    February 26, 2007
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    odd

    i didn't personally like it, didn't flow well.

    language: 1, rhythm: 1, subject: 1, tone: 1, form: 1.