A friend recited these lines to me
With ever a sad and longing sigh:
"Tell me why love hurts so much,
And I'll tell you the number of stars in the sky."
Well, I can't tell you why it's so,
But I can surely say these words:
"Tell me the number of stars in the sky,
And, truly, that's how much love hurts!"
Author notes
These are my thoughts on a quotation of a friend of mine.
Please tell me what you think
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I don't know about anyone else, but this one's timely for me! Absurdly so.
I needed to see it! And it's part of my answer for someone... My Queen!
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It's complex, yet simply put. No excess fluff, and a good message. Well written.
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short and sweet is what i would use to describe this beautiful, tightly packaged poem. it explains the unexplainable, by not explaining anything. if that makes sense to you at all. anyway, this poem makes sense to me. which is why i'm taking the time to say, good job.
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good
this is truly how much love hurts and al the emotion. cause when you put your heart into something it is going to hurt to put it back -
This was great.
Short, simple and to the point. Yet deep, profound and all encompassing as to the nature of love. You have captured the nature of love lost in a nutshell and done so beautifully.-Sole
language: 5, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 5.
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A prudent answer,
I find a bit of Zen in this poem and in the answer.
This one made me smile,
Bill
language: 4, rhythm: 4, subject: 4, tone: 4, form: 4.
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Great thought!
This is certainly one of it's kind!!
Enjoyed it to the fullest!!
Oh Boy! I better check out some of ur other writes too!!
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Very good
That was one heck of a creative poem, especially verse no.3 and 4 of the last stanza. You can go in much more detail and make the reader fell what you feel.
language: 3, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 4, form: 4.
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Piano guy
I think this is rich...very rich it has a deeper meaning..and I loved the idea of writing a poem based upon a quotation...
liked this a lot
Jo
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Love is painful
that's for sure. Without pain though, how will we ever grow as loving individuals? That is the question this poem has presented to me. Brings up a very trite, cliche, but true expression, "No pain, No gain!" I really like how you mirrored the first stanza in the second. Great job. I like reading your pieces.
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a poem with a message
I never get tired of poems with messages. And your poem is wrapped around a great message. What you do here is simple and effective - only eight lines, and regularity is preserved in the two four-line stanzas. Even the punctuation is similar and the quotation marks are in the same place.
As for the message itself, it is another original gem. Great, it's great to see an original message presented well and simply.
nish[81]
language: 3, rhythm: 4, subject: 5, tone: 4, form: 5.
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The infinite pain of love.
Excellent. Calm, thoughtful, rich with genuine feeling. I always enjoy poems that turn a thought inside out; and I enjoy this one because it does just that in a very skillful way. It says so much, PG, in only 55 words, and is all the more moving for me because of that. I like this one. It's neatly constructed and meaningful. Your talent surely comes through in it.
Lad
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