Mindless souls
Awakened in the night
Trapping others into believing that they are alive
But to those who are smart no that they are dead
Alive in the night
Wondering through towns
Searching for pure souls
The ones who have feelings for others
But for those who have none are mad
They never sleep
They don't have a home
Forms of humans but don't act like one
Hated creatures of the night
Running from fears
Creaking floors in homes
Breaking of once great things now nothing
No one will ever be the same
They wanted to find love when they were alive
But someone decided that they committed horrible crimes
That they had to be killed
For the ones who were their friends
Got on with their lives after they had left
But no one knew that they never crossed over
They planned on haunting the ones who decided they had to be
Killed
Please tell me what you think
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very good
This poem is impressive.I like it at once.These mindless souls who "don't have a home" and "run from fears" are perfect comparison with the souls of suffering people...While I was reading it I have a feeling that this is written exactly for me, and even I know it isn't, the poem entered in my heart.
This is a wonderful poem and I'm agree with skylight that your work is great.
language: 2.
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great
i like it verry much sometimes i feel like a mindless soul myself so i can understand what u mean and i think your work is greatlanguage: 4, rhythm: 4, subject: 5, tone: 4, form: 3.
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