Waiting by the window
she steps and pulls the curtain aside.
Taking just a peek
she watches her lover walk away.
A curve forms upon her lips,
a smile, thinking of thier last kiss,
sensous and warm.
"Good night my love,"
she whispers, blowing
a kiss into the night air.
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a night blossom
i like ur way of ur writing and ur spontaneous flow from ur heart!!! all the best for ur future poems!!!! -
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Thanks so much. I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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Hi,
This is quite a charming poem, the moment bitter sweet.
There are a couple of spelling errors; L6 ‘their’ and L7 ‘sensuous’
L1 & 3, has some good alliteration, there is the opportunity to extend this further in L2, changing ‘pulls’ for ‘slides’.
L6, ‘a smile’ probably isn’t required.
These are small nits in a very nice poem. Thanks for the opportunity to read and comment
Rgds
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urfriend1990
March 12, 2007