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Love

I get this feeling
So deep inside
My heart starts to pound,
When you come around.

Your always on my mind
Every hour of the day.

I told one of my friends,
I told her who I like,
She was in smile and excite.

I didn't like you before,
But I do now.
I just like to be around you
Even tho you don't know that.
When your not here
I don't feel like myself.

I want a hug from you
That would make most of my day go right,
But a Kiss would make my day go Bright.

Please tell me what you think

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  • NewYorker
    March 12, 2007

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    awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww

    aww this sweet....I love the rhythm and it sounds like it'd make a sweet song...?! Who knows I might just ask you if I can use the words for my next song! What'da think? Maybe?.....Anyways keep up the awesome work!
    Brooklyn
    aka wilted_rose

    language: 5, rhythm: 3, subject: 5, tone: 3, form: 1.