Do we buy a book?
With sheafs of green paper,
portraits of greedy leaders.
Or does the book buy us?
with
feverish promises and
seductive synopses.
Please tell me what you think
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Glossy Cover!
This is one of the most interesting short poems I ve read at SP, Nish. Great idea and just the right words and restraint to express the concepts at work here.
For spacing I´d put line 2s "With.." on a line of its own like the second stanza.
I really liked lines 6 and 7.
Great stuff. Mature and intelligent.
Warmest regards
gG
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Thanks gG for your comment and helpful suggestion! You're right - I'm just so used to giving out unusual line breaks that I forgot that conventional is better sometimes :/
thanks
nish[81]
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this is great
kind of captures the spirit of books today glossy self-help greatest thing since sliced bread over-hyped blurbs like, The Secret that don't deliever. there are no secrets.
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thanks dave!
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This is really... should i say... quaint!!!
And some really interesting comments as well. I just agree with Lad about the marketing mumbo-jubo which hype up a book far beyond what its worth... Among other best sellers, Da-Vinci Code for me is an excellent example.
I love the all encompassing phrase "seductive synopses" as well. Curt... and Cutting... great poem!!!
PS: The typo that Lad is referring to: you have written syn-PO-ses... should be syn-OP-ses... Cheers
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oops, sorry Lad, my eye just slip over that typo. thanks himanshumodi for pointing that out
nish
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Damn. Again, Lad got here before I did, and again, I must agree with everything he said right down the line. Another good one from you! Whatever you've been up to lately, keep it up!
Pie
language: 5, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 5.
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thanks cpie!
actually, I haven't been up to much, just been even more busy with work. but the mid-term break rolled around so I found some time to comment and post a few poems here.
cheers,
nish[81]
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Sharp and nifty, nish.
A fine little poem with big thoughts. That "greedy" in the first stanza strongly hints at so much of our possessive buying habits in bookstores - I've just GOT to have that book, because I need to look intellectual, my friends are all talking about it, the cashier will think I'm classy, and so on and on. (Not sure you need that capital W in the 1st line.)
And the second stanza hits into the gut of exaggerated praise on the book's covers, mostly by people we've never heard of, as in "this is LUMINOUS reading" or "a MAJOR young talent" or "utterly compelling" and so on. Marketing above all!
Good read for me; sharp as a razor.
(Minor typo: synopses)
Lad
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Thanks Lad, I'm glad you caught onto the meaning of that 'greedy' there. On the literal hand, it was meant to describe the faces of leaders that we see on our notes of paper, but I also wanted it to refer to our possessiveness, so I separated it from the 'sheafs of green paper' bit. Of course, that meant that the first meaning wasn't that obvious, but can't have it all.
and i'm not really sure, but I don't think "synopses" is a typo: my penguin english dictionary gives that as the plural form of 'synopsis.
thanks,
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synopses is plural of synopsis
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did i miss out on some innuendo here?
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I supported your dictionary spelling, but refuse to type narrow comments.
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