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Shed Blood

I cannot cry
But I can bleed
When life
Is to hard
To meaningless
It is easier
To take a knife
Than it is
To cry
I slit my wrist
Cut it open
As deep as I can
But I won't die
Not yet
So I lie there
Bleeding
Waiting for it all to end

Please tell me what you think

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  • pvtcreek
    April 18, 2007

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    i like it but it doesn't seem to end. i can relate to you once again but for most of us the end doesn't come...in a way causing us more pain due to the consequences of our previous actions


  • CountCrimsonAvarus
    April 18, 2007
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    Wow excellent write alittle emo and thats not my style but its a good write.

    language: 4, rhythm: 2, subject: 3, tone: 5, form: 3.