It's simple
Yet deadly
I love the feel
Of a blade against my skin
Of it slicing through my skin
Of the blood flowing freely from my wrist
I love the pain
The lights dim
As this world slips away
And I am cast into the shadows
I can still feel the blood flowing
Making me forget
My troubles in the world
Letting me express how I feel
Maybe one day
Someone can stop me
Help me find a new path
Save me
But for now
Just let life flow away
Author notes
please do not judge me by my poems i have a very dark mind
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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sadly,
But very good. Trying to kill yourself isn't the exit of problems and pain but despite this you have tried it(I don't know if you have tried to suicide or this is happened only with the character in this poem). I liked the way you have expressed the moment when you cut your wrist and the blood is "flowing freely" from it. The help will come and someone will halp and save you, be sure this will happen. I know it, I have gone throught it and I know, even in the largest and darkest tunnel in the end comes the light.When I had surrendered hope and gave up my "angel"(I call it that way cuz I feel it that way) at last came and save me, so keep the hope and your angel will come too in the face of your best friend I think...
And the last thing I want to say about the last line...Don't let the life flow away...Don't cause later you will sorry about doing it.
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Understandable
i can relate to you so much...i have a lot of scar's on my wrist and arms from doing the very thing you were addressing in your poem!!! your not alone!!! -
GOOD
All minds are dark because by very nature they are mysterious. Your mind cannot be any exception. But from your poems your mind appears to be very simple and crystal clear, that is what a good mind should be.
language: 5, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 5.
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