Feeling lost
sad
forsaken
despondent
Without you
life is empty
and dark
and lonely
Death
took you
from me
suddenly
and it is
only through
Death
I can join you
Please tell me what you think
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Different from 'she dances'. I liked the directness of teh tone of the poem. Very effective. I liked the last stanza particualrly because it made me fee incredibly sad because only death would join these two again. Had depth and emotion.
language: 3, rhythm: 3, subject: 4, tone: 4, form: 4.
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niceeeeeeeeeeeeee this is o greattttttttttttt
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To the point
I really enjoyed reading this for the simple fact that you didn't dance around your feelings, you described them exactly as they are, and you proved that fancy words are not needed to convey feeling. I love the last two stanzas. -
AMAZING!
this is really really really really good! me luv it! it's very deep and very sad! it has lots of emotion and i could really feel it! great job! and keep writing!
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Hey,
A very sad and painful poem. Losing a loved one is very painful. Poetry is a great venting tool.
Bill
language: 3, rhythm: 4, subject: 4, tone: 4, form: 4.
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