You gotta help me out
I don't know what I can say or do
That's gonna help you forgive me
I need to get you back in my life
I need to get back the love you gave to me
You treated me right
And I screwed it up
Please give me a second chance
I'm praying you're gonna come back to me
I'm praying there's someway you'll forgive me
Prove to me you've the bigger heart
Believe me when I say
You're the one I need
Please tell me what you think
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The poem is very simplistic using very uncomplicated language. It reads like a song but I guess since poetry is described as a form of art in which language is used for its aesthetic and evocative qualities in addition to, or in lieu of its lines.It could be a poem but nat a live one.
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alexe2014
language: 3, rhythm: 2, subject: 2, tone: 4, form: 1.
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yup
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Reads like a song
The poem is very simplistic using very uncomplicated language. It reads like a song but I guess since poetry is described as a form of art in which language is used for its aesthetic and evocative qualities in addition to, or in lieu of, its ostensible meaning (i got this defeinition from wikepedia). I guess it can be a poem. I am not sure I felt the emotions you were trying to express because I kept thinking, 'song! song!.
I see what you were feeling but I am not sure that I felt it.language: 2, rhythm: 4, subject: 2, tone: 3, form: 2.
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