It was a long search
ended in a great s...i..g...h!
Lose the confidence not -
was the intuition's chant.
Had the hunting been made worthwhile?
What do we call a real verse?
Pestering the mind
is not the right way -
the fact was realized.
The flow of thought
reaches nothing
but emptiness!
When do people recite?
And why?
Everyone is a poet and philosopher
while suffering!
Sadness may be the source;
smile may be the reason,
but
where does the sway begin?
Too many questions,
too many answers,
nothing satisfies
the greatest expectation.
Something stops to go further,
many things are
barricade to give up the act!
Then,
it was a small spark
answers the question -
Yes,
it’s ME!
- the best composition
of God,
a living poem!
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This poem was written long back when I was in my 12th grade...... Posted here just to supplement Lad's 'Shortest Poem'.... Just me putting cross my understanding......
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Thank you Akham for reading my little poem...glad that u liked it.....
lolz
Kiddy
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this is indeed a very beautiful poem and as far as the very sweet ending is concerned...it reminds me of a very sweet poem, which now i enjoy with clear meanings...
ONCE we read Tennyson aloud
In our great fireside chair;
Between the lines my lips could touch
Her April-scented hair.
How very fond I was, to think
The printed poems fair,
When close within my arms I held
A living lyric there!
by Christopher Morley
thanks for sharing such a wonderful thought
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Wonderful
One of the best I have come across on this site. Effortless and easy flowing it is like a cascading fountain.
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great poem
i love the line "everyone is a poet and philosopher while suffering -
Thanks for the honor, MK.
I'm sorry I missed this one, I like it much. Yes, I see it as a "supplement" to those silly shortest poems a while back, but your isn't at all silly - it's rich with humor and humility only a good poet could come up with - and, I guess, only another struggling, scribbling poet can fully understand.
So many fine phrases in it that dig deep into that terrible dry spell of facing blank pages: 'Lose the confidence not' - 'Pestering the mind' - 'The flow of thought reaches nothing...' - 'where does the sway begin?' 'nothing satisfies' - 'a small spark answers the question' - and the best line of all for me, 'It's ME!' I couldn't agree more. When poetic drought hits, the best and deepest source for new poems begins with that (divine) inner self; it's all in there, I think (I hope) waiting to be released with calm ease.
I see that you wrote it as a high-school senior, which makes sense; it's got a youthful exhuberance to it, an aliveness, an optimism - all refreshing to me.
Good writing for one so young. Good reading for me, Kiddy.
Lad
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I loved these lines, they made me laugh: "Everyone is a poet and philosopher
while suffering! "
Specific and insightful, this was really a hightlight to keep the middle of the poem from stagnating too much. I think the rest of the stanza that these lines begin, though, is a bit awkward; I got the sense that the voice changed between these two lines and the following four.
S8 is a bit vague; there are details everywhere else but here. This would work better if you implied the hugeness and impossibility of the questions and answers. What is the greatest expectation? Do we even know? If this confustion were more sense or imagery based, more emotional and evocative, then it would contrast better with the certainty of the end of the poem (which would highlight both parts well). Rewarded 8
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Pretty good poem for its age.
"the best composition of God,a living poem!" Lovely line. Indeed each of us is a poem written by God. Only He knows the end from the beginning; yet at each line, each stanza he leaves the choice of 'rhyme' up to us. We are responsible and accountable as persons for how we 'co-author' that unique poem.
How would you go about re-writing this now? What grammar and images could you improve or clarify? What sounds akward to you now? Are the tenses correct all the way through?
JG
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Dear Virtual-Dad,
I'm very glad to know that you liked this poem...Have an idea to develop this same idea into some elevated form... will work on it for sure very soon....
Thanks for stopping by...
Lols
-Kiddy
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Kiddy
June 9, 2007
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