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Pause

The storm has passed
Washing over a flood of pain
Restlessness and uncertainties
Leaving a splash of beautiful memories


Right now there is a long pause
Of eternal bliss
The pause will die a natural death, soon…
And days will go on
Unfolding mysteries
Happiness and sorrow will play hide-and-seek


Its got some cheek – this destiny!
It plays some cruel games and mocks us as we mourn
As only it knows that what lies ahead is a brighter day
Yet, it lets us wallow in pain
Maybe it wants us to appreciate what good we’ve got
And hold it close to our hearts


Right now my days are a pause
A hiatus of a future that’s uncertain but full of promises
And I smile as I look ahead, not scared of the unknown
As I have lying beside me, ‘My Life’!

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  • himanshumodi
    June 20, 2007
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    well... nice use of words... but not a great subject. and really felt a bit cliched. But i guess its more about getting out of hiatus. Some lines are a bit too prosy... like lines 13 and 15.

    Otherwise its quite poetic... just keep writing... once you get into your groove the poems will start flowing.


    • Charoo Sood Wady
      June 20, 2007
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      thanx for the critique. True, i am experimenting with my style of poetry...am into writing random thoughts these days. maybe some day i might get back to my rhymes .