At times I thought you were the one.
I thought I could depend on you.
But time has showed me through the years;
the only one I can depend on
is Christ, the One to
wipe away all my tears.
Maybe, it's my fault,
I tend to fall quite fast.
Not thinking about tomorrow,
hoping that all my "forevers" last.
Time is but a walking shadow
who passes those unprepared.
Giving shelter to the weak,
and straighting those who care.
Author notes
Written at the spur of the moment.
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I like this testimony of your faith. You are not ashamed to put it out there for all to see.
I like left justified on free verse. But that is just my thoughts. I belong to a free verse group and we mostly left justify our work. I'm impressed with your work and hope to see more of it. I haven't been on this site much but will be from now on hoping to see and read what you have written..language: 3, rhythm: 2, subject: 5, tone: 3, form: 1.
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It is nice. Has a good tone and flow to it. A few grammar issues, but then again I ignore them sometimes too. The subject is clear, but it seems to get off a bit. Not always on one topic. The title is off with the contents to me too.
I see you are very religious as well, proud too. I like it when people share what they believe in and all.
well done,
Ashley
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