The sound and smell of raindrops,
and your whisper in my ear -
the perfection of this moment,
I pray will never disappear.
But my prayer will go unanswered,
and I'll realize my fears -
when I see you're not beside me,
as raindrops mingle with my tears.
comment//critique please!! What do you think?
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Hi,
This really does a have a prayer like quality to it. I can picture a figure kneeling by their bedside, palms together and head bowed reciting this...that is until L5 when all faith disappears, arghhh! You gotta have hope!
Just as a thought for the last line “and raindrops mingle with tears” ??
Rgds
hobby
August 27, 2007
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