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Journey's time

Picture of framed love,
encircles diamond of gold.
Standing side by side,
awaiting journeys into time.

Suit of striped grey,
matching dress of pleated flair.
Hearts of beating togetherness -
chaperones of journey's time.

Collage of framed art,

now echo's steps of bliss.
Adages of aged years,

hint journeys' ending time.

 

Farewells bid;

each alone,

their final to undertake.

Fifty-two moments held -

signals of journeyed time.








 

Author notes

Thoughts on a framed photo of my deceased parents of the weding day.

Please tell me what you think

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  • September 3, 2007

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    I like the devoted generosity of this tribute, Frans.

    A photograph of loved parents surely can bring up deep sentiments, and I think you've managed them here with subdued thoughts. Each stanza moves along, providing more imaged details of their loving relationship, and each one's final line, playing on journey and time, keeps the poem nicely woven together.


    ...encircles diamond of gold.
    ...Adages of aged years... - both lines are especially appealing to me.

    For my reading, this poem is a rarely seen reminiscence on deceased parents; and your relationship with them, nevertheless, continues.

    It's possible that you want "suit" for "suite"?

    All in all, lovely.

    Lad