I wish life were like an MJ music video
All my problems
all my grief
all my debts
Would be solved by a dance sequence
thugs, vagabonds and pretty women
would all align
and crab crotches in unison
We'd laugh, drink
dance and party
And not care because as soon as things look down
We'll just dance
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Let's all get together and dance
Please tell me what you think
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hip-hop-hooray
hey kitten...this was funny especially
would all align
and grab crotches in unison,
people need to lighten up and not to take everything so seriously just like your poem
dave -
had a laugh here. Yeah, if we could all just be in MJ's video, life be less difficult, wouldn't it. But at times, that's what most of us have to do...take life easy. enjoyed reading this. It had a refreshing tone and though simple, its something a lot of us would wish we can simply do.
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I liked it
When i read this i was getting at that you were saying just let it all go, listen to you favorite song, and just dance without a care in the world. Take away from all the pain going on and so on. great work!
--Tori
language: 5, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 5.
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My favorite song is "Beat it" by MJ, thats where I got the idea, how 'bout you?
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Can I just dance too? LOL. I like this one as I have a similar opinion of listening to music, it doesn't matter my worry or strife, If I play a favourite song ( which are a lot ) I am able to be taken away from it all.
Love the words choice of thugs, vagabonds and pretty woman. Cept that I think it should be women as in many as you have put vagabonds with an s on the end to say more then one, then have woman which is one only. Would go better I think with women and to describe more then one like you have with the others
Otherwise I really like this piece and you pulled of the If life were like that......theme
language: 4, rhythm: 4, subject: 4, tone: 4, form: 4.
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Sorry, typo. I meant women. Glad you enjoyed it ^_^
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