Who am I?
I am a drummer
I am a poet
I am a lover of music
I am a lover of pets
I am a romantic
I am a fool
I am a failure
I am a success
I am happy
I am sad
I am angry
I am a juggalo
I am a Carnival sideshow
I am a player of WoW
I am a friend
I am a lover
I am a caregiver
I am here
I am there
I am ready
I am a loser
I am a waste
I am a cool kid
I am shallow
I am self-conscious
I am a liar
I am covering myself up
I am baring my soul
I am thankful
I am proud
I am Keaton Banks
Author notes
I'm out of touch, in the back of my mind I know I need to do this. to hear from you. Please tell me who I am.
Please tell me what you think
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Always internal, always changing
As far as the poem goes, it is very creative and I like the way it branches off into many different arenas and elements of life. It is not focused on one realm only but shows an identity that flourishes in many varied areas. That being said, I think expanding on the lines a bit might help. The repetition is fine but I think when lines are this sort it hinders the piece more than it helps. By expanding on your ideas you can have longer, more vivid thoughts while maintaining the repetition and a steady rhythm and flow. To answer your question: look within to find out who you are. Just know this, you may be many things and every one of those things will change over the years. -
you are some one who can only....no..... we can't tell who you are you got to find it out for your self noone can do it for you you can give any one this poem but who you are is deep with in you and its up to you to find that out for your self. But other wise this good just be who you and do what you wanna do you got a lot to go for your self
misty
xoxo
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It is to hard for someone else to tell you who you are, specially when I dont know you well enough
What I will say though, is it is a healthy thing to do to question who you are? In my opinion of course.
One thing -- is never say you are a failure, just say I failed at this one thing and I leanrt my lesson. Casue thats how it is, you may fail at something but its only one thing and it doesnt make you as a whole a failure. And definetly not if you can take something from it that helps you learn and grow
Okay I have probably rambled on enough now hahaha
I liked this for what it is as I feel often like its something I need to do, a personal reminder.
On the last note are you a drummer?
My fiance' is a heavy metal drummer, so gifted and skilled. I am fascinated everytime I see him play
So tell yourself you are a worthy person and thanks for sharing again Poetic Kitten
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